comment on josh's part 2

Josh, I really like how you incorporate Napoleon in your essay to describe Raskolnikov's superiority complex. I did feel at times the essay was a little bit run on, in the sense that it sounded like "first he did this, then he did this, and then he did this..." I think if you used a quote from the book you would be able to remove those run ons and make it more specific, since it is coming directly from the novel. Specificity is very important for the topic you are writing about, especially when comparing to Napoleon, so I think the use of a quote would help enhance your essay a lot.