Comment on Josh's First 500 Words

Josh, I thought your introduction was great. It was very informative, and you presented the novel and Dostoevsky very well. I think you go into the first body paragraph a little too directly, I think you should have a topic sentence about the paragraph before stating exactly what the main support for his behavior is and his dream. I think in that topic sentence you should mention his selfishness and that he basically kills two people for no reason -- and then go on with the first sentence you have no which explains how he got the idea. Once you have those two sentences, then continue on with the paragraph as you did. Overall, you chose a really good topic which I think will be really interesting for this paper. It's starting off really well.